We will be examining Chapter 6 pages 74-85. I have included this section below, taken from the novel. Warwick’s style of using short but meaningful descriptors is one of the highlights of his work. He is able to convey emotion by use of short, pointed bursts of information that relay what is going on in a more almost normal, conversational style.
“My Grandmother taught me well. When I did this as a child, she made me safe. Her soul protected mine, both within this world and the other, as I learnt. Now I must do this on my own. No one is here to rescue me if I stray too far from my body. Leaving my body, my soul senses a gentle force guiding it. Blinking, I realize I am floating above my body. Looking down I see each breath passing softly over barely open lips, my eyelids fluttering with each thought that races through my mind.”
As you can see in the example above, he refers to this soul travelling in a very simplistic form, giving us both a reference to the character having being taught by his grandmother and showing how this act occurs with words like “floating” and “eyes fluttering”.
“Over the next few years, so many people disappeared that the Romans sent a fifty-man patrol to hunt it. When they did not return, the Romans fled from the area.
Anyone foolish enough to venture there was never seen again.”
“Why would the creature leave the battle field?” I ask, confused.
“Egric, these creatures only survive by taking souls and bodies. It has been so long since the creature was satisfied, maybe more than one hundred years since it feasted well. Now, it will need to kill many people to be strong again. Each time you attack it, you weaken it. Then it needs to hunt even more. Every attack will make it angrier. Its need for flesh is so great it will go to any length to satisfy that hunger.”
“If it takes enough souls will it return to its lair?” I ask softly.
His dialouge hits key points in determining a novels viability. It uses plain english and keeps the flow on conveying points in a clear and decisive way. Readers often want a clear path in a story with layered complexitiy that does not feel complex. Warwick’s style is a good example of this, he shows that you can weave a narrative in a way that becomes accessible, approachable, and still leaves you with enough mystery to continue reading till the end.
In conclusion, it’s important to remember in writing dialouge and in story creation to bring home points by using simple wording that highlights things in a way anyone can understand. By using language that is easily understood, you create a more attractive novel that becomes more accessible to more readers.